fixing rewind flow

game/script.rpy

@@ -2,8 +2,8 @@
 # Scene 2: Sara Arrives
 
 define sara = Character("Sara", color="#c8a882")
-define thinking = Character(None, color="#c8a882", what_prefix="[[", what_suffix="]", show_two_window=False)
 define luno = Character("Luno", color="#82b4c8")
+define narrator = Character(None)
 
 # ── Persistent flags ──────────────────────────────────────────────────────────
 default checkpoint_set    = False
@@ -19,52 +19,55 @@ label start:
     with fade
 
     "The Iron Hollow training yard sits inside a converted warehouse district. Stone walls, packed dirt, the smell of old metal and new sweat."
-    thinking "I wonder what will await me in there."
+    "Sara takes it all in before she steps through the gate."
 
     show sara neutral at left
     with easeinright
 
-    thinking "Two people are already here. That boy over there looks pretty confindent. And a girl near the gate — looks like she noticed me."
+    "Two people are already here. A boy against the far wall, watching nothing. And a girl near the gate — moving like she already belongs."
 
     show luno curious at right
     with easeinright
 
+    "The girl notices Sara first."
     jump luno_greeting
 
 label luno_greeting:
     luno "You're here for the recruitment?"
     sara "Yes. Where do I register?"
     luno "The man over at that table takes your name. Then we wait."
-    show luno neutral at right
     luno "I'm Luno. Been here a few days already — helping with the wounded from last month's job. I know how things run here if you need anything."
-    show luno curious at right
+    "She doesn't say it like an offer. She says it like she's already taking notes."
     luno "So. Money, glory, or are you just bored?"
     jump choice_screen
 
-label rewind_choice(continue_label=None):
-    if checkpoint_set:
-        show screen rewind_prompt
-        menu:
-            "[[ Rewind ]":
-                hide screen rewind_prompt
-                $ rewind_used = True
-                scene black
-                with dissolve
-                show screen teal_wash
-                "The world pulls back."
-                "Colour drains to teal. Sound slows to nothing."
-                hide screen teal_wash
-                scene bg training_yard
-                with dissolve
-                show sara neutral at left
-                show luno curious at right
-                "Sara is standing at the choice again. Luno's question still in the air."
-                jump choice_screen
-            "[[ Continue ]":
-                hide screen rewind_prompt
-                jump scene_continues
+label rewind_choice:
+    if not checkpoint_set:
+        jump scene_continues
+
+    show screen rewind_prompt
+    menu:
+        "[[ Rewind ]":
+            hide screen rewind_prompt
+            $ rewind_used = True
+            scene black
+            with dissolve
+            show screen teal_wash
+            "The world pulls back."
+            "Colour drains to teal. Sound slows to nothing."
+            hide screen teal_wash
+            scene bg training_yard
+            with dissolve
+            show sara neutral at left
+            show luno curious at right
+            "Sara is standing at the choice again. Luno's question still in the air."
+            jump choice_screen
+        "[[ Continue ]":
+            hide screen rewind_prompt
+            jump scene_continues 
 
 label choice_screen:
+
     menu:
         "Why are you here?"
         "[[ Create Checkpoint ]" if not checkpoint_set:
@@ -91,7 +94,7 @@ label choice_screen:
         "I'd rather not say.":
             jump branch_silence
 
-        "[[ You asked the others the same thing, didn't you. ]" if checkpoint_set and silence_chosen:
+        "[[ You asked the others the same thing, didn't you. ]" if silence_chosen:
             jump branch_sharp
 
 label branch_money:
@@ -106,7 +109,6 @@ label branch_money:
     luno "They can be."
     "She doesn't push. But her eyes stay on Sara for another moment"
     jump rewind_choice
-    jump scene_continues
 
 label branch_money_post_rewind:
     sara "Same reason as everyone else."
@@ -119,7 +121,6 @@ label branch_money_post_rewind:
     "She shakes it off. Probably nothing."
     "Sara knows it wasn't nothing."
     jump rewind_choice
-    jump scene_continues
 
 label branch_purpose:
     $ purpose_chosen = True
@@ -139,7 +140,6 @@ label branch_purpose:
     luno "...Yeah. I know that feeling."
     "Sara can step back. Give the safer answer. Luno will never know what she almost said."
     jump rewind_choice
-    jump scene_continues
 
 label branch_silence:
     $ silence_chosen = True
@@ -149,7 +149,6 @@ label branch_silence:
     luno "That's an answer too."
     "She's not unfriendly. But Sara just became a question mark in Luno's mental ledger."
     jump rewind_choice
-    jump scene_continues
 
 label branch_sharp:
     sara "You asked him the same thing."
@@ -169,11 +168,10 @@ label branch_sharp:
     "But her eyes are sharper now, not warmer."
     show luno sharp at right
     jump rewind_choice
-    jump scene_continues
 
 label scene_continues:
-    thinking "She is a sharp one, have to be careful around her."
-    show
+    "Before the silence can settle, footsteps at the gate."
+    "Two more arrivals. The scene continues..."
     return
 
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